I was still tired, and I kept my head on the chair’s arm, clutching the blanket that someone- I suspected Tattletale- had draped over me.

Sounds like something she’d do.

I could see her in the bed in the other corner of the room, lying beside Aisha.  When I’d dozed off, it had been Brian and his sister sitting on the bed.

I wonder if they were in any condition to talk things over.

The blanket’s presence unsettled me, and I couldn’t put my finger on why.

Hmm. Is it not cold enough for Tattletale to have decided to put it on you, or something like that?

Also I wonder if the blanket on Taylor may have been at Brian’s request.

It was thoughtful, nice, and the fact that I didn’t know who’d done it or that I’d been unconscious and helpless when they’d done it, it shook me from the twilight of near-sleep.

Oh… oh boy. She’s not feeling safe when things are done to her without her permission, and now that’s tainting this nice gesture.

Which meant I was now wide awake when I desperately wanted to get back to sleep, to stop thinking for just a few minutes.

I’m still certain she’s going to wind up blaming herself for what happened to Brian over the last few chapters. Maybe we’re about to see some of that.

The second I started worrying about things, my shot at a good rest would be gone.  Worrying about things like Dinah, and Cherish’s hints that Coil wasn’t on the up and up about our deal.

Worrying really runs in the family, doesn’t it.

Also, seriously, Taylor, why did you think he was? It’s been a sucker’s deal from day one.

…Tattletale. Tattletale’s the one who made Taylor talk to Coil about Dinah in the first place. She also helped try to defend Coil against Cherish’s claims, along with Trickster.

She’s been trying to keep things together and keep people from turning on Coil. Why? Is she just working in what she believes are the group’s best interests, thinking everything would fall apart without Coil (which isn’t entirely untrue), or does she have personal reasons to keep everyone working with him?

Worries about what that could mean in the long run.  The newest were my anxieties over Grue.

Naturally. That’s normal when a friend is in… whatever this state Grue is in is. De-energized?

I slept, but it was less like parking a car and more like running one into a ditch.

That, right there, is a fantastic analogy.

I’d fallen asleep not by any choice on my part, but because I’d ceased to function.  Over the past few days, I’d hit my limits of endurance, only to push past them over and over.

Yeah, at some point you’ve got to give in and get some actual rest.

We’d made our escape without incident.

I assumed as much, to such an extent that I didn’t explicitly mention it. I mentioned that they’d need to fetch Regent and Bitch (and tell Genesis to dissolve), but I didn’t think there’d be any problems with that. Last chapter was clearly the climax of the Arc. Sticking another bit of conflict in before the dénouement would be unusual and potentially bad writing.

When we’d gotten Brian settled, I’d planned on staying awake and keeping an eye on him, only to drop off to sleep within a minute of sitting down.  I’d tried to push my limits once more and I’d discovered them.

Hey, at least it happened while you were safe. Or at least out of immediate danger.

When I woke up again, it was dusk.  I was curled up in a chair with my head on the armrest.  My eyes were sore and itchy, and I wasn’t sure why.

Hmm. Something to do with what little Bonesaw did to your head, perhaps? (Even if it’s just because of the blood that got in the eyes, that counts too.)

It could also just be the natural result of how little sleep you’ve been getting recently.

We’d settled at Brian’s headquarters, because it was close, and there had been the unspoken agreement that it would be better for him to be somewhere he’d be comfortable.

Makes sense.

Snare 13.10

Let’s try to make an actual chapter intro post, shall we?

Howdy, everyone, Krixwell here! Contrary to what I said at the end of the, uh, first attempt, I do know how to read (or do I? plot twist???) and that’s what I intend to do tonight. I’m here with Snare 13.10, which I believe to be the wind-down chapter of the Arc proper, much like for example 4.11 or 12.8.

My expectations for this chapter haven’t really changed, so let’s let Pastwell do the talking, since he’s clearly more coherent than me:

Next chapter: The wind-down, I think. First they need to get out of here and fetch Regent and Bitch (Regent can let Genesis know she should dissolve via Shatterbird), though. We’ll likely learn more about Brian’s state, either from him or from Tattletale, and maybe hear Imp’s story from the horse’s mouth.

So yeah, let’s stop messing around (yeah right) and have a look at this chapter!

Snare 13.10

krixwell-liveblogs:

Greetings, everyone, my name is Krixwell Jace, and tonight I’m going to be your reporter for the news.

So, the first topic today issss… oooooooaaaahhhhhhhhi shall begin with one hundred percent

percent

a day: percent

there’s no day: percent

tomorrow: percent

saturday: percent

at least one day

this is- this is not the script! where is the script?!

a day… sunday there’s no day, ah, i, it’s canceled so get ready for the giggles and laughs okay

greetings everyone my name is krixwell jace. today i shall present

*giggles* get it? like, i am so funny

so, the first portrait is– (krixwelleh jace, your reporter f)

ah, here’s the script

*ahem* excuse me

i don’t know how to reeeeeeead

…this was supposed to be a chapter intro where I just pretended to be a news anchor, but it semi-accidentally turned into a slightly edited transcript of this ridiculous video instead:

(seriously, watch it, a transcript doesn’t do it full justice)

Snare 13.10

Greetings, everyone, my name is Krixwell Jace, and tonight I’m going to be your reporter for the news.

So, the first topic today issss… oooooooaaaahhhhhhhhi shall begin with one hundred percent

percent

a day: percent

there’s no day: percent

tomorrow: percent

saturday: percent

at least one day

this is- this is not the script! where is the script?!

a day… sunday there’s no day, ah, i, it’s canceled so get ready for the giggles and laughs okay

greetings everyone my name is krixwell jace. today i shall present

*giggles* get it? like, i am so funny

so, the first portrait is– (krixwelleh jace, your reporter f)

ah, here’s the script

*ahem* excuse me

i don’t know how to reeeeeeead

loreweaver-universe: every window within a forty-mile radius of my current position has functionally ceased to exist as a window and can now be more accurately described as “potential shivs”, “the cronch”, “anti-foot countermeasures”, and/or “boy howdy do I hope they never find me” Looks like we found one of the men who bought Shatterbird’s power.

It is just me or you kind of underestimate Panacea/

Possibly.

I do think Panacea could undo Bonesaw’s work if it was all Bonesaw. The thing that made me think she couldn’t fix Grue was Mannequin’s parts. The casings, the technology, the pieces that aren’t covered by Panacea’s total control over biology.

Admittedly, those parts might’ve been fairly easily removable.

Prions are a real thing. They are proteins that are folded wrong in a way that causes brain damage in mammals (For instance Mad Cow Disease is caused by them) depending on which protein exactly it is that are folded wrong.

Prions are anormal proteins that caude diseases, like the mad cow disease

Ahh, I see. Makes sense that something like that would be used to disable the gemma.

Brian became SUPER-SAIYAN. How do you feel about this development? Do you think he’ll remain the good boy we know or do you think he’ll change?

Hmm.

He’s certainly going to need some recovery time, and I don’t think he’s coming out of a second trigger event like this, as well as everything he’s been through at Bonesaw’s hands, unshaped by the experience. But who knows how much he’ll have been shaped by this, or whether the obtaining of additional powers in itself could cause some kind of personality shift.

He’s already proven himself willing to kill, brutally, though I’m inclined to think he already was when it came to the Slaughterhouse Nine.

I don’t really know, honestly. Next chapter is going going to be interesting.

As for how I feel about his powerup, I think it’s a neat concept that needs to be handled with care in order to avoid power creep. If characters start having third and fourth trigger events, a line has been crossed into territory that makes your Dragon Ball reference quite appropriate. However, I trust Wildbow to handle it well, so I’m not too worried.

I do feel like a little more foreshadowing might’ve been good here. We knew double trigger events might be a thing, but it has only barely come up before, in a way that would be easy to forget long before it became relevant. As a result, the possibility of a double trigger is not quite a deus ex machina, but it’s really close and can easily feel like one.

But hey, the line between a deus ex machina and a good twist that works to the protagonists’ advantage can be thin sometimes.

Overall, I quite like this development, but feel like there are certain ways it could’ve been improved.

Cant clarify much, and dont know if the screener would rather redact this, since its not brought up again in the story, but Brian lied about what his trigger event was to sound more manly. But his first trigger does have to do with him wanting to protect Aisha but not being able to. Thus the second one being above and beyond the scale of the same situation. It fits, its beautiful, sad and fuck me do I not wish other characters to go through a second trigger event

Huh. His trigger story did seem a little odd in comparison to later ones, and it’s pretty much the only one we know that didn’t fit my theory that the power is designed to help out in the trigger event (this in spite of me theorizing something similar to that all the way back when his and Taylor’s were the only two I knew – I think I just liked the idea, honestly). Darkness is a power that would suggest a need to hide or blind, which has nothing to do with what Brian told us.

There’s one more detail (besides “Aisha is in trouble and I can’t help”) that needs to stay true for his actual trigger event: Aisha didn’t know he got the power at first, or at least, Brian didn’t know that Aisha knew. That suggests he didn’t end up using it immediately in a way that she would see (which lines up with his claim that he noticed his power later)

But yeah, I would imagine he was telling the truth about a lot of the stuff that had no bearing on his manliness. Very likely most of it was true except that he confronted his mother’s boyfriend with fisticuffs. Successfully, in any case.